I am guessing that you are asking how it would sound if it
were grammatically correct in current day prose form. Poetic form is different of
course. In Shakespeare’s day, poetry was mostly structured in popular rhythm and meter
forms like iambic pentameter and word order was mixed to stress certain words or
juxtapose images. These days, poetry is much less restrained by
form.
But in terms of translating this into prose, here are
some ways I would rewrite a few lines.
Sometimes the eye of
heaven shines too hotly. Or, sometimes, it is just too hot in the
sun.
The sun’s gold complexion is dimmed
often.
Everything that’s fair (about a summer’s day)
declines sometimes.
Death will not brag that you wandered
in his shade.
Consider the line you asked
about.
Every
fair from fair sometime
declines,
Since this is in
poetic form, there is no real “normal” placement for “from fair.” In prose form, if you
are sticking strictly to the rules of grammar, and keeping as close as you can to the
actual line, I would write it like this: Every fair aspect from the summer’s overall
fairness declines sometimes. All that’s fair from summer declines
sometimes.
The poetic use of “from” makes it difficult. It
would be more correct to say, “All that’s fair about summer
declines sometimes.”
“From” is a subtle indication that
summer is no longer present; that it has passed. This underscores the point that the
memory of the speaker’s loved one lives beyond the length of the summer’s day or summer
itself.
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